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You Make Me Sick!

Once upon a time, Ben and Erin found a treasure map. So they got into their submarine and travelled for miles into the middle of the ocean. Jaws the sea monster was looking for something big to eat, he was so hungry. Jaws spotted the submarine and ate it in one go! Ben and Erin were scared and didn't know what to do, but they could see the treasure chest they were looking for in Jaws' stomach as well! Ben had a plan. He started up the submarine and drove it very quickly round and round and round. Jaws started to feel sick and then he was! Erghhh!

Out came the submarine and the treasure chest and they washed up on an island.

They were safe and had some treasure too!
Ben and Erin now needed a plan to get off the island and get home without Jaws wanting to eat them again.

But that's another adventure.

by Shae Hood
Lockwood Primary School, Saltburn-By-The-Sea

Competition - My First Story 2017

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