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Holly's Magical Story

... In the magical woods, when they got off Shine the unicorn, they found themselves in a field of sparkly grass. Ellie was so happy to be in a magical wood that she cartwheeled across the sparkly grass.

As she rounded off her last cartwheel, Ellie saw a terrifying dragon. 'Spencer, Spencer, there's a dragon. Help, help!' Ellie called. Spencer came running over to Ellie. 'What shall we do?' Ellie said anxiously.

'Ellie run, the dragon is after us!' Spencer, Ellie and Patch the teddy ran as fast as they could run, but it just wasn't possible and the dragon soon caught up. Thankfully the dragon became out of puff and stopped to catch his breath.

Shine the unicorn came galloping up the hill to the rescue. They all quickly jumped onto her back and she flew them across a fairy dust sky to a magical candy land. When they landed, all they could see was mind-blowingly yummy candy.

As they stood and gazed at the divine candy, a cackling witch appeared. She pointed her crooked finger at them, then danced and pranced with joy to see visitors. Not sure whether the witch saw Patch nibbling one of her lollipops but she didn't seem to mind.

The witch showed them all how she grew her candy plants. It was fun meeting the witch but they were having so much fun they didn't notice the time.

'How will I get home?' Ellie said. Spencer asked the kind witch if he could borrow her broomstick to take Ellie home.

The witch had a little think and suddenly said, 'Yes, of course you can!' Spencer, Ellie and Patch darted home in time for Ellie to go to bed. Ellie and Patch waved goodbye to their friend Spencer and thanked him for a great adventure. Ellie wondered what the next day would bring.

by Holly Moult (7)
Beaconside Primary & Nursery School, Birmingham

Competition - My First Story 2016

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